Talk:Ooi/@comment-26195905-20150315094002/@comment-460323-20150315095844

For the Secretary (Married) line, shouldn't it be

(You're asking) What happened to the other girls?

The way you phrase it seems to imply Ooi's asking the admiral as to what happened to the other shipgirls. Unless, of course, that's what she really meant o.o. I suggest changing

Hmm, then it's fine... then... -> ''Hmm, if so then it's fine... if so...''

I think 'if so' sounds better than 'then' in the latter part but it kinda makes the front part sounds awkward.