Board Thread:New on Kancolle Wiki/@comment-25637142-20150131171807/@comment-25534439-20150206092354

Just looking over the start I have a few complaints with some paragraph groupings (first sentence of second paragraph belongs with the first paragraph, third and fourth paragraphs have the same topic and should be combined), lack of links/explanation (what is a resource, for new TTKs), some general page layout items (Expedition_page.png image under Unlocking an expedition should be right justified and allow text to the left like other images on the page to reduce whitespace, Expedition_fleet.png under Sending a Fleet... same issue). Additionally, a small image of the expedition return bubble would likely be helpful. The Sending a Fleet on an Expedition section starts with a blurb on sending an expedition, returning an expedition, then restrictions on sending an expedition; it would flow better as sending an expedition, restrictions on sending an expedition, then returning an expedition. The ships losing 3 morale per expedition note works better under the Great Success section, as the sole impact of morale is the great success. The blockquotes in the success conditions sections have several excess line returns that add empty space. The third paragraph under Support Expeditions states that "...the standard support expeditions only work in World 5 and events." which can be confusing after having read that the events have special expeditions in the preceeding paragraph. Under the Support Types subsection, the "; their information are listed below" is superfluous. The shelling damage calculation subsection feels poorly explained, perhaps an additional example or two would demonstrate the equations better (perhaps 2x DD, 4x BB and 2x DD, 2x BB, 2x CVL?)

...well that's a hefty list, now that I've typed it all. Should I just hack out the changes or let you all sort it out?