Talk:Musashi/@comment-25336329-20150410062835

Oh, come on! I'm just trying to make these Trivia and Notes more readable. And some of these notes are - simply put - in bad English. >_<


 * Why write it as "Paul Allen-funded team", when it would sound better as "team funded by Paul Allen"? And even if we'd leave it like that, it's supposed to be written as "Paul Allen -funded team".


 * Why write it as "attempt a beaching", when you could just say that she "attempted to beach"? Also, do we really need a linked definition of a beaching?


 * I think using the word "and" would be better than using the sign "&".


 * ...I just can't help but be bothered by that "4:06 hours" part. Is there any smarter alternative that is as short as that, or would the next best alternative be "4 hours and 6 minutes"?


 * And in general, I believe it's part of documenting aesthetics that if your listings will only have one thing listed (e.g. "The drop-rate was reverted..." is the only thing listed under that March 13th, 2015 update part), it shouldn't be listed at all, but included as part of the part it's under. But if there's some Wiki page that provides some guidelines for situations like these, I'd like to know.

I'll wait for an answer as to why the previous edit had to be reverted - at least in case of grammar - back to this. Because I'd really like to make this article more readable, but my previous attempts with that have just been reverted. So what am I doing wrong? =/